Round THREE = Stephen Leslie

(Refelction)
I thought the Prose's were actually very interesting but I don't really understand the point of a haiku after it, but again thats just my opinion. My favorite line in Stephen Leslie's Haibun is "I was alone with the dying patient, a women in her eighties. I pulled out my silver flute and in rhythm with her breathing played melodies and sometimes just tones of sound." because it is really descriptive and sounds like something that would be in a poem but it should only be a prose. I also really liked this because it shows and not tells because of the descriptive language. I don't really like the line "Speaking only when necessary. At the end of a long trip she guides me through the thick fog and haze, using her abilities to connect with an unseen higher power to guide us back home." because it doesn't do anything for me. It doesn't sounds like a regular paragraph or a poem to me. It does have descriptive language but I feel there needs to be more emotion in this line. Overall I think this is very cool to write about because its different than what I have ever written and it sounds like a lot of fun. I'm glad I got to look at some Haibans because it opened my eyes a alot.
Prose:
You don't know that feeling until it comes, the moments you wait for and the things you dream of. This is the best time of the year, no worries and no stress. In life you have to realize your main priorities and in summer, you don't have any. Your worries say small and your dreams stay big. The one time in the year you can be yourself 100%. No one has the same exact feeling, but with the wind in your hair and the sun on your skin you'lll never forget the moments like this.


(I did 2 Haiku's)
Haiku:
In the summer time
No stress no fights nothing wrong
Living the good life

Haiku:
Friends all around me
Shooting stars right behind me
Only my bestfriend


1/10 Deb Smith = (****)